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[sans-memories.livejournal.com]

Challenge: Blame
Title: Letting others take the fall
Word count: 168


Dear Sora,
We are very very very very very very very sorry for not waking you up.
The cookies were really really really too yummy and we got carried away.
I (Selphie) told Tidus to wake you up but he forgot.
I (Tidus) told Wakka to wake you up but he forgot too.
I (Wakka) am sorry I forgot to do what Selphie and Tidus forgot to do.
We promise not to eat the cookies that Kairi asked us to send to you again.
Your best bestest best pals,
Selphie
Tidus
And Wakka.


His eyes sparkled with mischief as he tucked the pencil behind his ear after he had finished writing the note. Casting his aquamarine gaze onto his sleeping friend, he could not resist the urge to grin. He used the back of his gloved hand to wipe the incriminating cookie bits from the corners of his upturned lips. He lifted the glass lid of the cookie jar and carefully slipped the note into the empty glass.

Comments

[khyuffie.livejournal.com]

Aww, I really like the childish tone you set there!

[sans-memories.livejournal.com]

^^ Thanks!

[everything.livejournal.com]

... I am so amused. XD

[sans-memories.livejournal.com]

... and I am relieved that people understand the drabble ^^;;

[everything.livejournal.com]

Riku is a cookie-thief. Of course. XD

[kacfrog711.livejournal.com]

Lol that was very cute. I have to say, I loved the twist-ending. Ah, Riku, you're a jerk but we love you anyway. XD Very straight-forward style, very silly, simple concept (Who stole the cookies from the cookie jar?!) but still entirely effective. Very nice job.

...though I think letters are usually written by one person, even when speaking for three (like birthday cards). So the "I(name)" is a little odd. Oh, there's a "to cookies" in the letter that should be a "the cookies." Might want to reread.

[sans-memories.livejournal.com]

^^ Thanks! Yup, I made some stupid mistakes.I hope I caught them all ^^;;

... The original idea was just to write a letter about Selphie, Tidus and Wakka being the original cookie-thieves (yes, the idea was spawned by "who stole the cookies from the cookie jar" and a packet of oreos on my table). But then I decided that it would be waaaay more fun having them framed by Riku instead. So... the letter started out to be written by Selphie but later changed to make it seem like what Selphie would have wrote through Riku's POV. Oh dear... I am confusing myself...

[happyegg.livejournal.com]

That was great XD Riku is such a little trickster. I found the whole thing terribly cute. Good job.

[wrong.livejournal.com]

XD That was very cute!

[prettywar.livejournal.com]

Hahahah, I absolutely love that. XD

Sneaky!Riku <3333.

[avatar-infidel.livejournal.com]

*laughs* That's very amusing. The simple premise and wry execution of this fic make it an enjoyable and pleasantly light-hearted read. Dastardly Riku!

I particularly like the way you used repetition in the 'confession letter' to convey the enthusiasm and youthful buoyancy of Selphie et al.

I can only see one small error, which is your use of 'upturn' instead of 'upturned'.

Wonderful. ^^

[eternal-moonie.livejournal.com]

I absolutely LOVE it!!