Ya know, when I first started reading this, I was half dreading the cliché-white-room-Naminé, but just as you're about to head in that direction you detour into new and awesome and some really nice writing. I'm very fond of the little side phrases in italics and parentheses. They're very lyrical and pretty and it just adds something that much extra. I love the dialogue; I usually like Naminé quiet and scared (in CoM, that's how she looks to me) and you have a somewhat outspoken one here, but you qualify it with: "she let him bait her into conversation again", which I adore. I like the Naminé/Axel dynamic, and while maybe I'm not personally convinced of the sexual side of it, you handle it well enough that even a non-shipper like me can just 'go with it'. And... yeah, I've just rambled. But seriously, you've some really strong writing here and I adore it. <3