100-- OT3 LUFF! Always good to see the trio being a trio. And being adorable at that! However, three people in dialog the way you have it set up is confusing. After a couple of read-throughs I can figure out who said what from the hints you've left, which is what let's the piece succeed. However, the hints aren't strong enough at the beginning. It's really hard to figure out who said what for the first few lines. Even going back through it's hard to do.
Also, personal opinion on characterization: Riku doesn't seem to me like the sort to beg, even Kairi. Sora's in character, Kairi's in character, but Riku feels slightly off to me. But that's purely opinion on 'accurate' characterizations, so feel free to take it with as much salt as you need. XD
85: I do and don't get what you're trying to do with this piece. I really, really like the way you wrote Roxas and the emotions he's showing. I like the admission that he's not changing, which means, to Roxas, that he's not alive. That was handled really well. Axel, on the other hand, I don't think was handled as well. You state "He hadn’t explained it that way of course" but then I don't see where or how he explains it otherwise. For the kind of admission that Roxas throws at him, Axel doesn't really seem to react. He seems to be somewhere between denial and complete acceptance, trying to pretend at life with Roxas, but not fighting Roxas's denial of that life. Axel just doesn't give back the same level of emotion that Roxas puts in, which is odd because Axel is, in the game, more expressive with whatever he is (o isn't feeling), while Roxas is relatively even keeled until everything is falling apart around him. Still, I like what you're trying for, I LOVE Roxas's admission and the way emotion he expresses.
83: This one I REALLY like. Took me a moment to put everything together, but that's mostly my fault. >.>; You know, I don't really have much crit to give on this one except that I REALLY like it.
Re: sweeeeeeeeeet
Also, personal opinion on characterization: Riku doesn't seem to me like the sort to beg, even Kairi. Sora's in character, Kairi's in character, but Riku feels slightly off to me. But that's purely opinion on 'accurate' characterizations, so feel free to take it with as much salt as you need. XD
85: I do and don't get what you're trying to do with this piece. I really, really like the way you wrote Roxas and the emotions he's showing. I like the admission that he's not changing, which means, to Roxas, that he's not alive. That was handled really well. Axel, on the other hand, I don't think was handled as well. You state "He hadn’t explained it that way of course" but then I don't see where or how he explains it otherwise. For the kind of admission that Roxas throws at him, Axel doesn't really seem to react. He seems to be somewhere between denial and complete acceptance, trying to pretend at life with Roxas, but not fighting Roxas's denial of that life. Axel just doesn't give back the same level of emotion that Roxas puts in, which is odd because Axel is, in the game, more expressive with whatever he is (o isn't feeling), while Roxas is relatively even keeled until everything is falling apart around him. Still, I like what you're trying for, I LOVE Roxas's admission and the way emotion he expresses.
83: This one I REALLY like. Took me a moment to put everything together, but that's mostly my fault. >.>; You know, I don't really have much crit to give on this one except that I REALLY like it.