ext_23880 ([identity profile] euphonious-glow.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] kh_drabble 2011-01-06 04:25 am (UTC)

Love this, especially as it ties all of these girls together. The last few lines are simpler, and hit the hardest.

Oddly enough, I find this a little too wordy, a little too reaching for the hyphenated adjectives. I do like the way it's written, but in this case, I think simplicity would perhaps have been more effective. Still, overall, I enjoy the sentiment and the language ^_^

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