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[alexander.livejournal.com]

Challenge: [084] Dust
Title: Dust
Characters: Larxene, Lexaeus
Spoilers: No
Word Count: 87


"keep me a secret"

earth shattering would have been a pun. but larxene made it anyway, needling her fingers into his shoulders. she dug into his muscle and let lightning run from her teeth to his lips.

silent.

because neither of them was a supposed, being empty and nothing. shells of enjoyment, secrets of the flesh. she didn't cling to him, but held onto him as one would a rock. there was nothing passionate in his slow earthy movements.

shhh.

hush. and larxene made love to dust.

Comments

[sabbato.livejournal.com]

I have to admit this is one of the more interesting pieces I've read in quite some time. Ironically I've roleplayed something like this before.

I relaly like your style and the way you describe things. Something about the simplicity makes me smile.

Also? I love it when people write about Lexaeus. Not enough people do.

[kendarath.livejournal.com]

Normally, the lack of capitalization probably would have had my inner english-elitist spasm in agony, but it just seems so right here. That was very clever of you.

Also, I found it really... hmn, how to phrase it. Just, your word choice, and the way you strung them together, I guess, just made it really powerful.

Hearts for you~

[lindskaba.livejournal.com]

I always find your pieces so inspiring and envigorating, so poetic. The last line is chilling. I wonder if it was the base of this whole piece? In such a short drabble, you completely captured both characters... It's simply beautiful. Nice job.

[arclights.livejournal.com]

Oh hell yes. :D Awesome, and very creatively handled. Love!

Larxene is such a ho in this community. XDD

[electricpower.livejournal.com]

You make this look easy somehow. ♥ Love the last few lines.

[lorei.livejournal.com]

I think it's amazing that you can write something so good in so few words! Not a fan of this pairing, persay, but this drabble is really excellent. You wrote the two of them so well!

[euphonious-glow.livejournal.com]

Now that is interesting. Larxene and Lexaeus? Your style is interesting, and the descriptions of the Nobodies.

[tabitha-dornoc.livejournal.com]

This is one of those pieces that is just pretty. Pretty on the screen, pretty to say aloud, pretty in word choice and grammar choice. I love the sounds, 'shh', 'hush'; there's an almost 's/shh' repetition through the whole drabble. And just a wonderful use of the challenge topic. *hearts*

[i-got-spunk.livejournal.com]

Now that's a pairing you don't see every day :D