ext_186286 ([identity profile] igivebugshugs.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] kh_drabble2006-05-07 03:03 pm
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Challenge: [62] Question
Title: Unknown Fear
Word Count: 67 (So little for me. ._.)
Notes: I'm not super freaking awesome at drabbles because I always want to add stuff, so I told myself I wanted to make it under 150. However, when I tried to add to how much I have now, it ended up being like 300-something. So... I'm staying with this small itty-bitty number. And it's starting to burn my retinas. o.o


“What are you running from?”

His eyes so full of fear looked upward, body shaking with unshed tears. The question didn’t calm him down; only justify his fear.

“I don’t know,” he croaked out. Hair out of place, circles underneath his eyes, clothes wrinkled. Goose bumps crawled over his clammy skin, multiplying like wildfire. Cold sweat trailed its way down his face.

He was scared, and it scared me.

[identity profile] syvia.livejournal.com 2006-05-10 03:31 am (UTC)(link)
I like that this makes you guess who the speaker and the narrator might be. There are a few different pairs of people and the situation changes depending on who it is. That you don't tell the reader means we have to think about it.

Nice drabble!

[identity profile] syvia.livejournal.com 2006-05-11 05:58 pm (UTC)(link)
Aww, flatterer.

^^ Hey, whatever you write gives you more experience, and we get to read your 'practice'. Win-win situation. :D