[101: Spider]

[masakomoonshade.livejournal.com]

Challenge: [101] Puppet
Title: Spider
Word Count: 187

He liked to sit back and watch as the others connived and planned. It was as enthralling as it was repulsive -- each manipulating everyone else, plotting and scheming until they all unraveled one another. Schisms were drawn, alliances made and overlapped and discarded, all so seamlessly that the entire Organization was molded into a single deceitful web, at once intricate and deadly. But any web can only have so many spiders--it wasn't long before they began to squabble and fight. It wouldn't be much longer before they tore each other to shreds.

There was only one moth among all these spiders, one marginally innocent creature trapped in the web, but even after Roxas escaped, there were still strands of those webs on his fragile wings. He would be their puppet, if not their ally. And if he refused, those wings would be torn away.

Axel would not stand for it. If he had to tear down each and every web, so be it. If he had to destroy his fellow spiders, he would not hesitate.

Because everything, anything was worth it, if only to save that precious golden moth.

Comments

[lindskaba.livejournal.com]

Mmm, I really like the image you've created here, of the Organization being like spiders all weaving one convoluted, crazy web of deceit. Also that you included Axel in the spider metaphor because, even though we love him and he has...perhaps a more pure reason for doing what he does than the rest of the Org? he is still quite deceitful, more than most of the Org, and it's important to remember that. I wish you'd let that image carry over into your description of him a little more, though... Maybe I'm just a sucker for bastard!Axel XD Overall a nice piece! though there is a typo in the first sentence -- just thought you should know ♥

[masakomoonshade.livejournal.com]

Thank you for the review! You're right; I probably should have included more of Axel in that, because that's how I initially planned it out--I just fell in love with the contrast that Roxas brought into the drabble.

And I read over it again and corrected that typo--at least, I think it's the one you were talking about. Thanks for pointing it out!

[hotasphyxiation.livejournal.com]

ho man, i love this. :D The spider metaphor you use throughout the piece is so perfect for the organization... and the part about roxas still having strands of the web on him, even after he left, perfect! i really like the concept you used for this.