ext_159379 ([identity profile] taistoi.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] kh_drabble2009-02-19 02:18 pm
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Challenge 177

Challenge: 177 [Pretty Lies]
Title: Starscream
Word Count: 160
warnings: COM spoilers? Also the title and icon make no sense whatsoever unless you're trope savvy.



Smile. Flatter him, tell him how smart and wonderful his plan is. Play along, pretend like you’re just the man he needs, pretend that you are in his camp 100 percent, don’t ever let him know that you’re plotting his demise.

Show no signs of insubordination.

Subvert his authority every chance you get.

And suddenly he trusts you, oh yes. Puts you in a position of power, gives you an important job.

And you do it, faithfully, but you do it in such a way that he can’t tell how badly you’re screwing him over.

The look on his face when you stand gloating over his fallen form is what makes it all worthwhile.

Marluxia dreams of this moment plenty, savors it as Sora climbs higher and higher, but comes no closer to being able to cry “Xemnas has fallen!”

And meanwhile, Axel looks the other way while Namine escapes, a wicked smile dancing at the corners of his mouth.

[identity profile] idiosynacophony.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 09:58 pm (UTC)(link)
The last line? Excellent. I love the way you build it up and then BAM. :DDD♥

[identity profile] idiosynacophony.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 11:33 pm (UTC)(link)
Don't really know Transformers, but going on this fic, perhaps it's because Marluxia is actually rebelling against his 'lord' whereas Axel is just shitting things up for the hell of it? :D?

[identity profile] oreo-81369-17.livejournal.com 2009-02-20 01:36 am (UTC)(link)
doode that was so cool haha Mar's all like bwah this is what I'll do and it will be awesom~! and Axel is just like woo i R doin in and doin it good haahah

[identity profile] hotasphyxiation.livejournal.com 2009-02-20 05:40 am (UTC)(link)
Whooo, love the Marluxia-Xemnas power struggle. The way you wrote this is just pure awesome- such dead-on characterization of Marluxia! I just love how you structured this- and the Axel line at the end!- oh my goodness, wasn't expecting that one... :)

Really really awesome job on this and great take on the challenge!


[identity profile] spoke.livejournal.com 2009-02-22 01:41 am (UTC)(link)
Which just makes me wonder, again and again and again, how come nobody ever spots these guys?!

Marluxia has 'untrustworthy' stamped all over him, I swear. :P

Axel, on the other hand, can be disturbingly believable. >>