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Challenge: Blame
Title: I should have...
Word count: 89
He said he did not do it.
I did not believe him.
The hope in his beautiful blue eyes faded into oblivion leaving despair in its wake. Regret tore my heart into pieces. But I just stood there, lost in my emotions.
I should have stopped him from leaving. I should not have let him go. I should have gone after him. I should not have listened to those rumours. I should have told him I was wrong. I should not have hesitated. I should have …
…believed him.
Title: I should have...
Word count: 89
He said he did not do it.
I did not believe him.
The hope in his beautiful blue eyes faded into oblivion leaving despair in its wake. Regret tore my heart into pieces. But I just stood there, lost in my emotions.
I should have stopped him from leaving. I should not have let him go. I should have gone after him. I should not have listened to those rumours. I should have told him I was wrong. I should not have hesitated. I should have …
…believed him.
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Date: 2004-12-19 05:11 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2004-12-19 10:57 am (UTC)But it was definitely a nice practice at writing from the blmae pov. I really liked the use of repetition (the idea of "tyranny of the 'shoulds; comes to mind. Too much psych. XP).
(And, just an aside, you might want to reread. I think by "Regret torn my heart..." you meant "Regret tore my heart...")
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Date: 2004-12-20 01:35 am (UTC)(*bangs head against keyboard* I need a beta >_<;;)
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Date: 2012-06-03 07:44 pm (UTC)