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[invisibledancer.livejournal.com]

Challenge:[85] Alive
Title: After Thought
Word Count: 200
Anything Else: *Spoilers for Axel*. This is the most direct answer to a prompt I have ever written and probably ever will. but I enjoyed it. And since good writing stole my usual beta, I forced i_got_spunk to read this over for me.



He had never felt more alive than he did in the few moments prior to his death.

Lying on his back looking into a familiar pair of blue eyes set in an unfamiliar face, he finally understood what it meant to live. It was clear to him now that life was more than breathing and feeling. Life was in the heart, and hearts were never alone— Sora and his friends lived for one another, unlike the members of the Organization.

It was within Sora, Kairi, and the rest that life truly existed. A heart wasn’t just something to gain or lose, it was a connection— a tangling web of emotion, thought, and passion from birth until death. The life inside the hearts linked not only people but entire worlds together.

In the moment he lay facing his fate, he knew that when the Nobodies’ others had lost their hearts they had given up their ties to humanity. Nobodies were all that was left: disjointed, empty shells that could never truly be connected again—doomed for a future of non-existence.

As his limbs began to fade, his one regret was that it took death for him to finally see life.

Comments

[lindskaba.livejournal.com]

Mmmmm. It's literal, but it's inspiring; a very Kingdom Hearts-appropriate discussion of existence. Really. Just wow. I've seen this scene drabbled so many times (including, sort of, by myself), but you've really brought some new and lovely ideas to it. The last line hit me really hard. Great word placement and just... Great job, hon ♥

[invisibledancer.livejournal.com]

yeah, I know this scene gets drabbled a lot which was why I was hesitant to write it at first, but the damn thing kept nabbing at me till I got out of bed at 4 am and wrote the first sketch of this... which was about twice the size. (thoguh it doesn't help that I have broadway all up ons now!) but I am happy you liked it!

[i-got-spunk.livejournal.com]

What? 'M not good enough for you? I see how it is.

[invisibledancer.livejournal.com]

you know I love you! ^^ just saying that linds always does it and can't because it's her challenge.
::begs for forgiveness::

[euphonious-glow.livejournal.com]

This is really interesting. I've grown wary of Axel fics lately since there's so much garbage, but I think you've characterized him very well. I can almost feel his great sense of irony here that he begins to understand life when he's dying. And I really like your explanation of what the heart iss and why the Organization doesn't have it.

[kunoichi-life.livejournal.com]

<3 very introspective and philosophical. I love what you say about the organization and what the heart really is: connections to people you love. Beautiful message, lovely writing and a kickass drabble :D.