Guuuuh. This is really really well done. It took me a moment to realise what story you were using, and then when it clicks it just hurts, really. But, gah, you've done awesome with the pov, staying in character, and connecting feelings into words. You've written desperation, which is hard to do. <3
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Date: 2007-09-04 04:03 am (UTC)