Challenge Post

[syvia.livejournal.com]

Challenge: [125] Requiem
Title: For Six Lost Children
Word Count: 129
Spoilers: KH2- throughout
Rating/Warnings: PG / none
Notes: Rampant poetry. This is not meant to be sung to the tune of Brahm's Lullaby, so I beg you not to try. The attempt will twist your brain, which is painful.



Lullaby, lullaby.
Draw the blindfold,
cross your eyes.
Sleep has taken
back the sky.
Tears you feel you,
do not cry...
lullaby.

Lullaby, lullaby.
Smooth the edges,
paint his eyes.
White the buildings,
gold the sky.
New his world now,
just a lie...
lullaby.

Lullaby, lullaby.
Give you over,
lose your eyes.
Join in secret
with the sky.
Dark steals over,
can't deny...
lullaby.

Lullaby, lullaby.
Memories drift,
behind your eyes.
Lift the Keyblade
to the sky.
Friends have gone now,
find out why...
lullaby.

Lullaby, lullaby,
Need and daring,
fill your eyes.
Land supports you
'neath the sky.
Still you'll go and,
dare to try...
lullaby.

Lullaby, lullaby,
Ache is leaving,
close your eyes.
Slip you gently
from the sky.
One last word,
before you die...
lullaby...

lullaby.

Comments

[taistoi.livejournal.com]

♥

I... I love how no one is directly implied, but you can tell who it is. That was absolutely gorgeous, and I love it when Sora, Riku and Kairi are referred to as sky, land and sea. Gorgeous.

[syvia.livejournal.com]

It was fun! I didn't plan it that way at first, then used the blindfold line and... yeah, couldn't resist the idea.

Thank you. :D

[lindskaba.livejournal.com]

....You just....wow, dear. This is something new and daring from you, and I like it. A lot.

[syvia.livejournal.com]

Daring? ^^

*chuckles* Not new- just very very infrequent. I like poetry well enough, but it's not often that I stretch that muscle.

Thank you very much!

[jamfase.livejournal.com]

:O

What an interesting take on the prompt with this format! There's something incredibly hypnotic about the style and pacing of this piece. It's absolutely lovely--very, very good job. :)

[syvia.livejournal.com]

Thank you! ^^

There's something haunting about a lullaby (although the idea can be abused- a buddy of mine once said 'oh GOD, don't do 'hush, little baby'- eveyone does that!' while looking for something creepy for use in an rp).

I'm glad you liked it.

[euphonious-glow.livejournal.com]

Creepy and beautiful and moving. Wonderful use of words.

[syvia.livejournal.com]

Thank you. ^^