[identity profile] pieces-inmyhand.livejournal.com posting in [community profile] kh_drabble
 Challenge: 265- Darkness
Title: The Concept of Giving Up
Word Count: 533
Author's Notes: My first time here, trying to post something? Warning: Birth By Sleep spoilers are found here.


It hurts.

It hurtshurtshurts.

Or it would hurt, if you had anything of your own left to hurt with.

But there's too little of you left to spare for hurting anymore.The frigid touch of greedy, curling shadows had long since turned your heart numb in whatever essence of moments passing you had.

You could barely force yourself to feel and keep feeling, dragging emotion after weak emotion from the dark pit of your Heart and fueling yourself with them, keep fighting, keep straining against the chains of inky blackness wrapped around your self, clouding your memories and recollections, distorting time until you no longer remember it's passage.

For all you know, you've been trapped in here, locked away in the yearning black shadows for an lonely eternity, alone and forgotten. Years felt like seconds. Days felt like months. A moment could last a week, a minute a fortnight.

But still you fight. You fought with the desperation of someone who knew he couldn't win.

You can't lose yourself to the empty yawning darkness surrounding you. You can't. Giving up was something, like the concept of time, you'd utterly forgotten. You would keep fighting. You would. For the friends whose names hovered just out of reach, but couldn't quite grasp the words or the meanings to and force your lips to shape the sounds. For the family, your family that had shattered like a fine wine glass on hard stone.

The glass fragments that cut your fingers and made you bleed.

You try not to scream. You refuse to.

There's a new soul governing the body, nodding your head, clenching your hands, and walking with your legs, and the new soul is blind to you both, prisoner and warden alike, knows nothing of what terrible dangers his Heart holds for both him and the beautiful World he now dwells in, and you want to despair as the new soul is lied to over and over and over again, twisted and warped into a thing, a horrible monster, a loyal creature of Darkness.

So history repeats itself. The new soul didn't even see it coming.

You want to despair. You don't.

There's a choking haze of darkness coating your heart, your weak thoughts dragged under a bitter fog of black. Even when you would struggle to remember and pull yourself together, you still stumbled. You couldn't even remember why you fought at times, when your disloyal memories deserted you once again, all you know is that you must, absolutely must keeping waging war against the enemy who holds you hostage, and torments you so.

Feed the burning fires of rage and hatred that had sustained you when the faint, vague recollections of warmth & friendship couldn't and remember how this foe—this horrible enemy took everything you loved away from you.

That feeds your seething urge to claim revenge on this creature of Darkness that shackled you in chains and took away your friends. You never even found out what happened to them after your life was snatched away from your control and that just fans the flames of loathing even more.

You want to cry. You don't.

Because you can't.

Not anymore.

Never again.

You have nothing left to cry with, nothing left to hurt with, nothing left to fight for.

But you keep fighting anyway.

What else could you do? You no longer remembered the concept of giving up.

Date: 2011-06-21 11:26 pm (UTC)
ext_218012: (misc// rose tinted glasses)
From: [identity profile] iki-teru.livejournal.com
Welcome to the comm! It's so good to see new faces around, I hope you enjoy your time with us. ♥

On to the drabble!

Second person! I always love to see what people manage with this tense. and this was fabulous and heart-breaking AND I KNOW WHO THIS IS! which is very exciting for me, because i'm awful at the guessing game :D

Lovely first addition, I can't wait to see what else you write ♥

Date: 2011-06-22 04:46 am (UTC)
ext_218012: (Default)
From: [identity profile] iki-teru.livejournal.com
pfft. despite popular belief, we are not an elitist community bent on internet take over. ♥ We were all new people once upon a time, and if there aren't new people, how do you make new friends?

(that's another thing, a great many of us have become rather fab. friends through this comm, so by all means, sit and stay a while ♥)

Date: 2011-06-22 07:41 am (UTC)
kiaxet: (...huh?)
From: [personal profile] kiaxet
...people believe we're an elitist community bent on internet takeover? Man am I out of touch with the rumor mill nowadays.

Date: 2011-06-21 11:49 pm (UTC)
kiaxet: (Someone Save Me)
From: [personal profile] kiaxet
Why is this only your first time here just now? Where have you been all my fandom life?

I absolutely love this piece. The emotion is raw and powerful, and the details - capitalizing Heart and Darkness every time, the simile with the wine glass, the sparse yet pointed use of italics - just make it. Basically, I love it and you made me wibble really hard.

That said, welcome to the community!

Date: 2011-06-22 07:40 am (UTC)
kiaxet: (Girly Little Ankles)
From: [personal profile] kiaxet
I would say something about being happy you're out of the closet, but. Uh. There's really no good way to phrase that without hitting some huge double meanings, huh.

...nice to meet you! 8Db

YES oh man Terra has, in my opinion, the worst ending, just because he is scattered in pieces and possessed and then scattered again. Convoluted Kingdom Hearts metaphysics at their brainmelting, heartbreaking worst.

You're welcome! It's always good to see new people here.

Date: 2011-06-22 05:52 pm (UTC)
kiaxet: (Wait What (NC))
From: [personal profile] kiaxet
You can have all the kickass powers in the world; it doesn't change the fact that a bad ending is a bad ending, and Terra's ending was a bad ending.

I...trollbait? What?

Date: 2011-06-22 11:55 am (UTC)
ext_699015: (Default)
From: [identity profile] rayne-destiny.livejournal.com
This is utterly amazing. I can't write second person for anything in the world, I always screw it up somehow. Love it!

Date: 2011-06-22 01:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] manyissuesali.livejournal.com
I love new people! I'm fairly new myself, and I've not been beaten or hazed or spit on, so I think you're safe. : )

I'm blown away by this piece, it's definitely a GREAT first addition! Second person FTW plus Terra angst...that's about all it takes to win me over. Seriously, I love every line. This is fantastic.

Maybe I'll come off more coherent and less flail-y next time, but this time I'm just going to sing praises and throw confetti at you. It might be more effective if I could spell confetti, but I digress.

Date: 2011-06-22 05:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] manyissuesali.livejournal.com
Don't even get me started on how much I love Riku. <3

Writing in second person is rare, yes, but good writing in second person is even harder to find.

Date: 2011-06-23 05:45 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cygna-hime.livejournal.com
Permit me to add my voice to chorus clamoring "OMG welcome please stay or at least leave the fic with us when you go".

Man, I love this fic so much you have no idea. SO. MUCH. Second person is, secretly, my favorite point-of-view, and Terra is, not-so-secretly, my favorite tragic hero.

I cried a little. *sniff* You really bring home the horror of it.

Date: 2011-06-23 07:40 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] spoke.livejournal.com
*also adds voice to the chorus of glomping the new person*

This is really awesome - I love pieces looking at the mess that resulted when the body-snatching failed. ♥

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