drabble for challenge: Silence

[baka-neko.livejournal.com]

Challenge: Silence
Title: darkness is silent
Word Count: 74
(anything else):


it's so quiet here

oh kairi, wake up. talk to me. don't you hear my voice? you are here next to me, yet i cannot hear your voice.

are you dreaming of sora? (do you ever think of me?)

i would give you my heart so that you could walk and sing and laugh again, you are not made for silence.

oh kairi, I did not know this till I came to those without hearts: loneliness is one heart beating amongst the heartless.

Comments

MOD

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Please place your drabble under an LJ-Cut.

Re: MOD

[baka-neko.livejournal.com]

Apologies. Lj cuts added.

Re: MOD

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Thank you.

[annjirika.livejournal.com]

If next time you could use capitals, that would be much appreciated!!! It's just a big pet peeve of mine, sorry. Anyway, I like it. It's probably exactly what Riku thought/felt/said to her. "You are not made for silence." I really like that part.

[baka-neko.livejournal.com]

*rueful* It was deliberate on my part -- Riku is feeling very small and lonely in the dark. Unfortunately I didn't convey it very well, but thank you!

[annjirika.livejournal.com]

OH!!!!!!!

AHA!!!

That's genius!!!

Okay...so that works! It works very well actually. An original way of conveying emotion - or at least I've never seen it done before!!


Ya know what, that is the third drabble I have wrongly interpreted. I should just give up. Ahaha.

Anyway, I still liked it.

[musiq-mistress.livejournal.com]

Hmm... I liked it. There's never enough angst!Riku to go around. x] This drabble makes me think of them on Captain Hook's ship.

[vollykins.livejournal.com]

"loneliness is one heart beating amongst the heartless."

Quite simply put, I love it. :)

[baka-neko.livejournal.com]

Thank you!