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[moontear.livejournal.com]

Whoo, got this done early. How 'bout that. :P Again, you're going to notice a particular theme when you read it. ^^;; Heehee.

Theme: Blame
Title: My Apologies
Word Count: 299

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This was hard.

I hadn’t expected to fall for him so easily, but I did, and here I am, gazing at the ruins of the once beautiful bastion. And I can still remember his rich, deep laughter, reverberating within my mind like… chocolate. Creamy, thick chocolate, that coated the roof of your mouth and your tongue, and you sighed in bliss from the pure taste. His laughter did that to my mind, my heart…

I should have done something to stop him. I saw all the signs, but I… I still…

I still let him get away. Let him be corrupted. Maybe if I could go back in time, say different things, do something to stop the oncoming madness—maybe then, I wouldn’t be here right now, gazing sadly at the remnants of a once beautiful cherry wood desk. It’s destroyed now… marred by the Heartless’s claws.

I traced them with my fingertips, shoulders drooping just slightly. I used to love how he said my name… like it was a caress meant only for the most delicate of ears to hear. It embarrassed me back then, and I supposed it still did—but I didn’t blush quite as much as before.

Was he really corrupted that easily? Had the darkness controlled his heart as if he were a mere puppet?

I thought you were better than that, Ansem…

I turned slightly, gazing out at the dying sunlight past the broad window located in the ruins of his study. And I remembered times long past.

…I wished that I could go back… Even if I couldn’t have done anything, I still wanted to be given a chance again to just try. Maybe I could have…

I bowed my head, eyes closing slowly. Heh. I was such… a fool…

I’m sorry.

Comments

NICE!!

[yami-yume.livejournal.com]

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww! T-T So sad! I really like it though! So beautiful. This should be written into a longer story!!! *glares*

Anyway. Yes, this is really nice and you have captured my interest...as usual. Though there is something about this that makes me REALLY want to read it...

Sora: Baka. You think that way about everything she writes.

SHHHHH! E-heh...ignore him. ^_^ Anyway, think about what I said... *grin*

Re: NICE!!

[moontear.livejournal.com]

^^;; I'm going to add it to my A+L arc, whenever I get around to it, so I guess you can look out for it there, but you'll probably be waiting a while.

[happyegg.livejournal.com]

Ooh, very nice! And done so promptly too.

Can't say I understand it completely, as I can't figure out whose POV it's from, but I never actually finished the game ^.^ Still, very nice. I was able to enjoy it even without full comprehension.

[moontear.livejournal.com]

^^;; You didn't really have to finish the game to get it... I'm sorry you didn't understand, but it was meant to be slightly confusing. ^^;;

[happyegg.livejournal.com]

Oh. *Embarassed cough* Well... I still liked it.

[moontear.livejournal.com]

Oh, I'm sorry, I didn't mean to embarrass you. T_T;;

[happyegg.livejournal.com]

Don't worry, you didn't really. I just feel stupid when I can't pick up on things. Not your fault one bit.

[uzumakisama.livejournal.com]

T___T More Ansem~!! <3333 Again you captured him like I want to, whenever I get around to him. It's so sad how he's so misunderstood...

Very lovely, but of course you knew I'd like it XD <3 I specifically liked the image of the desk and its marred surface.

[moontear.livejournal.com]

Thank you. T-T;; I was worried.

Yes, feel teh Ansem... <3333

[kacfrog711.livejournal.com]

I agree with uzumakisama: the image of a claw-scarred desk is gorgeous, as is someone running their fingers across it. This is a wonderful little reflective drabble. Your writing style is very natural and flowing. The only thing is that not knowing whose POV it is is a little distraction while reading, and while I figured out pretty quickly (even before you gave out the name) it was Ansem being talked about, the speaker could really be just about anyone. ...except that we know where your preferences lie from past drabbling. ^_-

Oh, and on that note, I really like the history you've created for these two. Keep it up. ^^

[moontear.livejournal.com]

^^;; Hee. Thank you for paying attention to my particular "theme".

Yes, I liked the imagery of the clawed desk, as well... It's..sad, in it's own way. I think so, anyway. : P

^^;; I plan on putting together an arc for A+L/L+A, actually! Hee. It's a lot of fun writing about them. :)

[wrong.livejournal.com]

Sorry for the late comment. ^__^;;; I like the imagery that you have used to bring across the feelings the narrator had for Ansem, the anger as well as the bewilderment and, I think, a bit of disappointment in Ansem. I adore your portrayal of who Ansem is as well. Lovely piece.

[avatar-infidel.livejournal.com]

I really like the tone of this drabble. It aptly conveys the sorrow of a lost love whilst also touching upon the bitterness experienced by those left behind and their inevitable lapse into feeling guilty, both of which are characteristic of Leon's persona. His tendency to blame himself for things beyond his control and his strict adherence to his code of self-sufficiency, any departure from which leads him to feeling helpless and frustrated, are both portrayed nicely here. His desperate desire to change the past, too, is very tangible.

I have a strong desire to read Ansem x Leon fanfiction now. ^^

[eternal-moonie.livejournal.com]

loved it!