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[tabitha-dornoc.livejournal.com]

Challenge: [061] Create
Title: Four Before Five
Word Count: 166
Notes: Set in KHII, Destiny Islands. Kairi. Slight spoiler if you haven't gotten past the six days of Roxas.



It's far too violent now to be called a 'crumple'.

Squash. Crush. Toss.

The curve of her palm is stained with black ink from sliding across useless words over and over in a frantic desperation to reach the end of the page.

She's never wanted to write her name so badly. Five simple letters she refuses to sign until the numerous ones above are perfect. Perfect.

One bottle. One chance.

She wants to imprint her heart into words. Paint her skin with pen and press it to paper. Mirror herself to page so successfully her signature isn't even necessary.

If only her pen could do that. If only it could create more than the stale, grey words it can now. If only it could translate into language even a taste of what she wants to say.

If only it could remember those four elusive letters that should be at the top to balance her five across the bottom.

If only -

Squish. Scrunch. Throw.

Start again.

Comments

[tabitha-dornoc.livejournal.com]

Uh. Sad as in 'unhappy', or sad as in 'pathetic'? Why is English so ambiguous?

[fatamorrigain.livejournal.com]

Ohh... sad is right. But I really like that 'six days of Roxas' part in the notes. Makes it sound like Christmas, or something equally special. Which I guess it is, because it's Roxas. : )

[tabitha-dornoc.livejournal.com]

LOL On the first day of Roxas, my KH gave to me, some new foes called Nobodies.

[alexander.livejournal.com]

omg that's great XD It needs to be a whole song.

[syvia.livejournal.com]

*lmao* ^^

On the second day of Roxas, my KH gave to me, two men in black coats~

[igivebugshugs.livejournal.com]

This is good. I'm not gonna lie and say it's horrible, or that it's the best omgaj;sdlkgh, but it's in the middle. And I think it's very content there. I really like how you portrayed Kairi- desperate. You could feel her emotions in your words. It kinda gave me this itching feeling that I need to do something. If you know what I mean.

[tabitha-dornoc.livejournal.com]

I'm glad my drabble made you... itch? XD Thank you, I really appreciate the general honesty of your comment, and I would hope nobody lies about their opinion on a drabble; what's the point in commenting at all then?

[tabitha-dornoc.livejournal.com]

Thank you. :)

[aishiteru.livejournal.com]

I'd like to say that this is beautiful. It's perfectly written. There's an urgency and desperation in the words that is conveyed through how they are said, not simply describing, and that's unbelievably difficult to do. And it fits the challenge theme beautifully.

Amazing.

[tabitha-dornoc.livejournal.com]

Eep. Thank you. And since it's your challenge theme, I'll take that as a double compliment. Cause I wanna. XD

[alexander.livejournal.com]

Your fic has been pimped at weekly13! here (http://community.livejournal.com/weekly13/566.html#cutid1). I hope you don't mind :D Great work!

[masakomoonshade.livejournal.com]

... <3

I don't know what else to say.

You capture characters perfectly. Absolutely perfectly.

[oni-gil.livejournal.com]

Poor Kairi. I have no Kairi icon. Drat. So Namine will suffice.

I know that feeling up there! It usually happens when I make a valiant stab at writing poetry (which rarely works), but sometimes just... in the middle of things. When I just can't get the point across! It makes me envious of those writers who can just... convey. It happens with Kingdom Hearts fics, I notice, because of those deeper nuances (ooh, fancy) we mentioned before. You get those in these short ones, particularly. Luc Court is very good at it, too, and some other authors whose names I can't think of right now. It makes really good, really depressing, print-it-out-and-keep-it-to-read-later fic.