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[selphish.livejournal.com]

Challenge: Breaking.
Title: This Alone Won't Bring Disaster
Word Count: 200 exactly.
(anything else): This is my first drabble for a challenge ever. Be gentle. Part of Kairi's dialogue is taken directly from the game.

It was broken.

He stared down at the crumbled necklace of thalassa shells he held in his calloused palm. She had given him many things over the years: birthday presents, holiday gifts, and items she had crafted with her own hand.

But this... This was the most important thing that she had ever given him.

"Long ago, sailors would wear them and pray for a safe trip. And pray that no matter where they went, they'd come back one day." She turned her azure eyes to meet his own as he admired her latest creation from over her shoulder. "Even if we're separated, Riku, we'll meet back here as long as you have this." She turned to face her silver-haired friend and opened his palm, placing the necklace of thalassa shells inside.

He was not crafty with his fingers like Kairi was. His hands couldn't braid string together or crochet winter scarves or apply bandaids perfectly on injured elbows and knees.

There was only one thing those hands of his were good for.

He let the broken necklace fall from his hands and dragged one leg behind the other. A crimson trail marked the boy's path, but he didn't notice.

Comments

[everything.livejournal.com]

... Awwwe.

[selphish.livejournal.com]

<3

[fightfair.livejournal.com]

Ah, interesting. I like how you handled this relationship and this take on the theme was really great. *_*

[fightfair.livejournal.com]

Oh, and, I think you switched where you put the title and wordcount? xD

[selphish.livejournal.com]

...That happens when I'm lacking a brain.

[selphish.livejournal.com]

Thanks. :D

[yaoibanshee.livejournal.com]

[yaoibanshee.livejournal.com]

[wrong.livejournal.com]

I think it's lovely. Even though it's written so simply (no writing flairs, no attempts to be symbolic and stuff), there are just so many layers interwoven into this piece that is so fun to look out for. Riku is so real in here.

[selphish.livejournal.com]

Thanks, lovely. <3

[offensive.livejournal.com]

Cuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuute!! <3

uh. to be... deep and meaningful in my review..

Like fire_bringer said, I like how simply it's written. It kind of fits with the game itself, very simple, but still conveys what its supposed to. and I love the line There was only one thing those hands of his were good for. leik woah. I've always loved it when Riku is portrayed as hopelessly destructive. Because he's not as gentle a person as some fics make him out to be, and you just got it right there in that line. *squee*

[selphish.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad that I could invoke such feeling from a mere drabble. :D I feel confident!

[caidentity.livejournal.com]

<3

Like most people have said, I like the line 'There was only one thing those hands of his were good for.' Perfect~ for that broken feeling. Just . . . wonderful. It makes me want to coo and give Riku a hug.

But hey, that's Kairi's job, isn't it? ^_~

Love the way you handled it ^^

[spiralledfire.livejournal.com]

((This is DC, not caring about clicking the "more options" button. Therefore, I'm posting in my MugenJou account. =D))

Yeah, what she said.

Who doesn't want to give Riku a hug...? *hopeless fangirl. XD*

[selphish.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much. *__*

[dreamer1789.livejournal.com]

That was beautiful and so very painful. Really deep. Very enjoyable to read. ^^

[eternal-moonie.livejournal.com]

I totally loved it!