Fimbulwinter

[taichara]

Title: Fimbulwinter
Challenge: [068]: Time
Wordcount: 218
Character: Vexen
Spoiler Warnings: Passing reference to characters from KH2.
Notes: What does it mean to be in a place that does not exist?
A moment of reflection for XIII Kikan's Number Four.


Trailing hems soft as night and dark as black ice swirled about his heels as the frost-master strode quickly from the faint-neon chamber, scattering the bone-pale empty husks before him as he slipped snow-silent through the chiaroscuro that was this half-real prison.

Years, long empty years; and yet, he was unchanged.

Heavy locks of frosted cream and snowy brass fell down his shoulders, framed a face long set in hollow bitterness and empty pride; and not a moment since that so-swift agony had marked him.

There was no end to stasis in this unreal world; no blinding day, no pale-shining orb hung heavenward for the nightmaster's moon-eyed dancer to sing his savage lament to.
Only the eternity of nothingness, the endless night – a heat-death of the universe that even winter's scholar could not hope to match.


Our glass is broken, the sands bled out – the clock has stopped;

And for how long will we wait here empty in the dark?


Though winter's bite did him no harm and his empty soul felt nothing, the frost-master shivered as he paused in his stride, lifted his dead gaze toward the hollow king's broad balustrade, his shadowed court.

Forever was a long time coming; and the darkness, without end --

Comments

[lindskaba.livejournal.com]

Exquisite. Your prose is quite beautiful, your vocabulary rich, your descriptions apt. The only problem I have here is that your sentences tend to drag on a bit, and so the rythem is sort of...off. Your writing reminds me of my own, actually :) Run-on sentences are something I am personally working on. Otherwise, this is truly beutiful. I love the ending, the use of the open hyphen. Very, very nice.

[taichara]

*wry chuckle* Yeh, sometimes the endless sentences get the better of me ^_^; I'm trying to improve that bad habit, though; and on occasion I even win XD

(I suspect that a tiny portion of my sentence problem is trying to avoid sounding too much like verse. But I could be wrong ..)

I'm very happy that you otherwise enjoyed it, though; and thank ye for the kind words! ^_^

[avalonestel.livejournal.com]

Magnificent descriptions, as usual. Your work is always extremely beautiful because of it, and the piece itself is lovely. Wonderful job!

[taichara]

Thank ye! ^_^ Glad that you enjoyed it!