Touch like Snow

[shining-heart.livejournal.com]

Title: Touch like Snow
Challenge: Winter
Wordcount:165

Something cold touched his face. For a moment, he was sure he had fallen asleep on the beach and Riku; with his odd icy finger tips; was attempting to rouse him.
The cold spread in small pinpricks across his entire face. It touched his nose, slipped by his eyelids. That coldness even attacked the rest of the exposed areas on his body, his arms, and legs, and neck.
It was almost tickling.
His lips parted in a slight smile; and the cold attacked him there. "Riku, stop." he half laughed.
He did not want to open his eyes, because somewhere deep inside, he knew it wasn't real, what he was imagining.
"Sora! Sora wake up!" cried Donald.
"It's snowing!" hayucked Goofy.
His eyes slid open slowly. He looked around. Strange tiny white fluff was falling from the sky. This was the coldness he had felt.
Sora looked around, keeping his face carefully blank, hiding his disappointment that he really had imagined his friend being there.
And somehow; that made it colder...

Comments

[snarechan.livejournal.com]

And somehow; that made it colder...

Oooh...very nice way to end it. I could have sworn I felt a shiver run right down my spine.

[savifa.livejournal.com]

Ooo. Nice story. The only thing I have to complain about is your over use of ';' in place of ',' at certain points. It kinda made me twitch. *tends to be a Grammar Nazi*

But it was a nice story, and I like how you clinched it.

[shining-heart.livejournal.com]

xDD we don't have very good english teachers at my school so I tend to over use the whole ';' thing. I'm so glad people like it though! ^^ i was worried.

[fightfair.livejournal.com]

Ah, well-mixed fluff and angst. Love the descriptions in this.

[purple-angel01.livejournal.com]

sad...but good...