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Challenge: [o84] Dust
Title: Ashes
Word count: 89
Characters: Guess. No, really.

Notes: The idea came to me in a fit of morbid.

This is more tame than what the original, highly carnivorous bunny had in mind. It will do.


Ring around the rosie, pocket full of posies....



It was a random flower he'd grabbed off the road. Just ripped it out of the dirt, not really paying attention to what or whose it was.

Ashes to ashes.

Kairi's fingers, slender and pale, were on his arm. Comforting or cautionary, he couldn't tell.

You bastard. You were supposed to wait for me.

He didn't care that they shook. Their presence didn't stop him from flinging the flower in with the dirt.

Dust to dust.

Without a word he turned and walked away, leaving the funeral far behind.

Date: 2006-11-23 06:56 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] arclights.livejournal.com
lol surprise. <3

Short and pointed right at the heart. Critical damage, ow.

You win yet again. ♥

Date: 2006-11-24 02:01 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lindskaba.livejournal.com
Absolutely chilling.

I'm pretty sure I know who it is, but it makes me hurt to even think about it.

Date: 2006-11-24 06:46 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lindskaba.livejournal.com
Ah! I'm nervous... I'm always like, people guess who's in my fic XD but then when it comes to me doing the guessing...

I'm going to say Riku is the 'speaker' and Sora is the deceased. The bit about Kairi's fingers being "comforting or cautionary" really did it for me, as well as the entire attitude about the speaker. He seems very...edgy and tortured and weathered, really weathered, and it just screams Riku. So I hope I'm right ^.^;;;;;

Date: 2006-11-24 03:03 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lorei.livejournal.com
If I'm right with who it is..then this is really quite morbid (though in a lovely way.)

Very nice!

Date: 2006-11-24 03:16 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lorei.livejournal.com
Oh? I think the original sounds pretty neat-- but the tone works so well in this one. Blood and yelling-ness probably would have taken away from it.

Because I'm not original at all, it's Riku, right? Talking to Sora? In any case, that's very much what works for me :D

Date: 2006-11-26 03:59 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tabitha-dornoc.livejournal.com
...

*is dead*

This is cruel and wonderful. Riku is Riku and Kairi is so Kairi, and I don't know how you manage that in 89 words.

Date: 2006-11-26 06:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] i-got-spunk.livejournal.com
I definately saw Riku immediately, this is so him. Well done :D

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