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kh_drabbleChallenge: [159] In Another Life
Title: Repetitive Natures
Word Count: 499
Summary: Who do you think you'll meet in your next life?
Rating: I suck at this, but, PG-13 I guess? I'm only concerned with it because of some cussing and implied gore.
Notes: I'm partially apalled at what I've done to Axel, here, and partially thrilled. Because I liked the Reverse/Rebirth Org. members. I almost wish I thought I could pull off the implied rest of this. But then it would no longer be a drabble. Um. Also I would probably be creeped out with myself. Moreso than I am now. Gah. XD
His head was splitting. He wasn’t sure where he was - in the brief moment he’d had his eyes open, it maybe looked like a lodge. Not the one he’d been staying at, though. And he hadn’t been there, he’d been... yeah, climbing. Ahead of the tour group, because they were boring. Then the ground started shifting, and he knew not to call it an earthquake,
memories rattling loose in his mind like the earth shaking around his feet; fighting and dying, a dark voice like a wind rushing through him all fuel and direction and why not? if it didn’t matter, and nothing did
light
betrayal in a crackling web that torched everything he almost might have cared about because the whole pattern might’ve held but not the charred remains
and he’d called out for help even though he was pretty sure no one could hear him over the noise. Didn’t remember seeing anyone coming before he’d gone under, either.
So. If he expected anyone from the last life to find him, it would’ve been Roxas. Sora. Whatever he was called now. Or maybe Saix, because he remembered the guy holding a grudge like it was a replacement for his heart. But Lexeaus?
Maybe there were worse people to be found by than Saix.
Which was of course when he heard the door opening. He left his eyes closed, and listened as the guy sat down nearby. Pen scratching, low discontented muttering. After a minute, the clink of the pen against a cup? “I’m perfectly aware that you’re awake, Axel. You flinched as I crossed the room.”
He glared, trying to get the room into focus. Darker hair and blue eyes, but it was definitely, “Vexen. The hell I did, bastard.”
Vexen smirked over a cup of something steaming, which gave him a moment of vertigo. Vexen didn’t do hot drinks, right? “It’s Vincent, Axel. And I assure you that you did, you simply... may not be aware of your reactions.”
He winced, shifting on the bed. Couch? He still wasn’t sure, because everything... felt numb. “Shit. You drugged me.”
“You’d be a screaming incoherent mess if I hadn’t. John’s still not managed the finesse he used to have. I’m afraid he broke a few bones.”
“John? John, right, Lexeaus. And my name-”
The little creep interrupted him. “Is inconsequential. Whoever you are now, you clearly remember being Axel. Which makes it surprising that you’re so calm. But, better for the experiment, I suppose.”
Shit, however he’d reacted to that he shouldn’t. ‘Vincent’ was looking more like Vexen every second. “Experiment?”
“When John and - oh, very well, Lexeaus and Zexion?” And he could feel himself struggling to move now, because the bastard’d chuckled when he saw that reaction. “When they return, we’re going to try a little dissection to see if there’s a difference between a reborn Nobody and an ordinary human.”
It wasn’t so much that he thought someone would hear him screaming as that he couldn’t stop.
Title: Repetitive Natures
Word Count: 499
Summary: Who do you think you'll meet in your next life?
Rating: I suck at this, but, PG-13 I guess? I'm only concerned with it because of some cussing and implied gore.
Notes: I'm partially apalled at what I've done to Axel, here, and partially thrilled. Because I liked the Reverse/Rebirth Org. members. I almost wish I thought I could pull off the implied rest of this. But then it would no longer be a drabble. Um. Also I would probably be creeped out with myself. Moreso than I am now. Gah. XD
His head was splitting. He wasn’t sure where he was - in the brief moment he’d had his eyes open, it maybe looked like a lodge. Not the one he’d been staying at, though. And he hadn’t been there, he’d been... yeah, climbing. Ahead of the tour group, because they were boring. Then the ground started shifting, and he knew not to call it an earthquake,
memories rattling loose in his mind like the earth shaking around his feet; fighting and dying, a dark voice like a wind rushing through him all fuel and direction and why not? if it didn’t matter, and nothing did
light
betrayal in a crackling web that torched everything he almost might have cared about because the whole pattern might’ve held but not the charred remains
and he’d called out for help even though he was pretty sure no one could hear him over the noise. Didn’t remember seeing anyone coming before he’d gone under, either.
So. If he expected anyone from the last life to find him, it would’ve been Roxas. Sora. Whatever he was called now. Or maybe Saix, because he remembered the guy holding a grudge like it was a replacement for his heart. But Lexeaus?
Maybe there were worse people to be found by than Saix.
Which was of course when he heard the door opening. He left his eyes closed, and listened as the guy sat down nearby. Pen scratching, low discontented muttering. After a minute, the clink of the pen against a cup? “I’m perfectly aware that you’re awake, Axel. You flinched as I crossed the room.”
He glared, trying to get the room into focus. Darker hair and blue eyes, but it was definitely, “Vexen. The hell I did, bastard.”
Vexen smirked over a cup of something steaming, which gave him a moment of vertigo. Vexen didn’t do hot drinks, right? “It’s Vincent, Axel. And I assure you that you did, you simply... may not be aware of your reactions.”
He winced, shifting on the bed. Couch? He still wasn’t sure, because everything... felt numb. “Shit. You drugged me.”
“You’d be a screaming incoherent mess if I hadn’t. John’s still not managed the finesse he used to have. I’m afraid he broke a few bones.”
“John? John, right, Lexeaus. And my name-”
The little creep interrupted him. “Is inconsequential. Whoever you are now, you clearly remember being Axel. Which makes it surprising that you’re so calm. But, better for the experiment, I suppose.”
Shit, however he’d reacted to that he shouldn’t. ‘Vincent’ was looking more like Vexen every second. “Experiment?”
“When John and - oh, very well, Lexeaus and Zexion?” And he could feel himself struggling to move now, because the bastard’d chuckled when he saw that reaction. “When they return, we’re going to try a little dissection to see if there’s a difference between a reborn Nobody and an ordinary human.”
It wasn’t so much that he thought someone would hear him screaming as that he couldn’t stop.
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Date: 2008-09-09 01:40 am (UTC)*icon is quite ironic, yes it is*
Awesome. XD
I'd scream at Axel to run away, but we all realize very well that he can't, poor bastard.
:DD If you make it more than a drabble I would be HAPPY to be freaked-out as all heck and review.
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Date: 2008-09-09 01:17 pm (UTC)It being more than a drabble - one thing is I'm really not certain I could pull off gore, and I don't want to mess it up trying?
The other is that it wants to expand in the other direction too - it wanted to start with the three of them meeting up, and then Axel. Well. *points up*
And then I'm not sure if it was going to go anywhere else.
Zexion says yes, but Zexion seems to have come back with a slight megalomaniac streak that refuses to take into account that I might not be able to pull it off. And needs to pick a name, dammit.yiiikes. I think I'm going to try anyway. XD I shall link back if/when I get anything finished? :)
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Date: 2008-09-09 01:59 pm (UTC)XD If you're not comfortable with forward, backward is always an option!
:3 I encourage you to go for it- but don't post unless you're satisfied with the results. I agree with Cygna down there- this drabble is perfect the length it is. (But I'd love to read a prequel or some kind of follow-up although I'm not really saying to go into detail with the vivisection because for serious horror fic is difficult.)
Vague is good! :D Vague works, because it can be more frightening that way. I- yeah... I'm babbling.
:D Please do link if you write another. X3
(I'm thrilled by this drabble because you wrote it very well structurally and because not many writers I've seen can go there, much less make it good.)
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Date: 2008-09-11 08:06 am (UTC)So, I have been thinking about this, and I'm going to be working on it? Just, I can be very slow. I will definitely link back if I finish another - writing is a given at this point, I don't think I'm going to be happy with myself if I don't try. ^^;
(I'm thrilled by this drabble because you wrote it very well structurally and because not many writers I've seen can go there, much less make it good.)
#^.^# Thank you!
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Date: 2010-07-21 03:23 pm (UTC)Um. Still not sure it's any good. http://archiveofourown.org/works/102161
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Date: 2008-09-09 01:51 am (UTC)O__O;
That's... that's all I have to say about that.
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Date: 2008-09-09 01:19 pm (UTC)But. That I? I freaked you out? As much as I've read through your stuff and been freaked out And haven't even touched the vore-thing because that word right there is major freakout for me?
I feel rather accomplished. omg XD
Thank you!
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Date: 2008-09-09 08:31 pm (UTC)rotflmao!! haha your comment made my day, that's so funny. It does take a lot to effectively freak me out, so good job! XD
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Date: 2008-09-09 02:02 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2008-09-09 08:35 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2008-09-09 09:52 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2008-09-09 01:53 am (UTC)... though I find myself wanting to know Zexion's name. XD
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Date: 2008-09-09 01:21 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2008-09-09 06:41 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2008-09-09 02:30 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2008-09-09 01:23 pm (UTC)Icon approves of this fic.
Date: 2008-09-09 02:42 am (UTC)I think it's good at the length it is--it's actually more horrible left to imagination; when described, it's simply gross.
Re: Icon approves of this fic.
Date: 2008-09-09 01:27 pm (UTC)I know. I like him in KHII for the most part, and then. I play CoM, or watch the cutscenes at kh-vids, and I remember that I hate him, too. x.x
The being gross? That was what worried me. I've read a few writers who can pull that off and make it somehow interesting, but I don't think I'm one of them. So, better to play it safe. Erm. So to speak.
Contrary to icon, cranky!scientist does in fact approve.
Date: 2008-09-09 07:10 pm (UTC)What sends me mostly away from the gore route is that, even if I describe what *I* find the most disgusting thing, it won't be someone else's most horrifying thing. If I let readers fill in their own most horrifying thing, it works better for me. (But I vote for more in the backwards direction, because they are my genius babies.)
Re: Contrary to icon, cranky!scientist does in fact approve.
Date: 2008-09-11 08:15 am (UTC)and hope whatever Vexincent is planning hurts. A lot. Oh yes. It does. :)
And that is a good point, about letting the reader fill it in. Also, vote for going backwards has been noted, and I will link you too, when there's something finished.
Re: Contrary to icon, cranky!scientist does in fact approve.
Date: 2010-07-21 03:24 pm (UTC)Here: http://archiveofourown.org/works/102161
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Date: 2008-09-09 02:52 am (UTC)I really don't look forward to voting tomorrow.no subject
Date: 2008-09-09 01:28 pm (UTC)Tell me about it, surely this is some kind of record.no subject
Date: 2008-09-09 03:35 pm (UTC)Implied torture like this is so much more powerful than graphic description (for me, at least) - it's both scarier not quite knowing, and I really don't think the most explicit writing can ever hope to truly capture it.
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Date: 2008-09-11 09:50 am (UTC)I don't know, there's someone named, I think, xanatos_samurai who does these things very well? But I was sure I couldn't, so. All's well that ends well?
Relatively speaking. >:)
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Date: 2008-09-11 07:28 pm (UTC)xanatos_samurai isn't coming up for me. D:
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Date: 2008-09-12 12:29 am (UTC)And I was wrong, yaoibanshee has it spelled right. xanthos_samurai. *resists the urge to go poking for fic right before work* >>
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Date: 2008-09-11 11:28 pm (UTC)And this fic? I love. ♥ I wholeheartedly agree with everyone in that the implied torture has a far greater impact for me, and I would absolutely love to see any kind of follow up on this piece. (Though as Zexion is perhaps my favorite character of the series, my vote goes with backwards as well.)
Awesome job, and congrats on the win! *thumbs up*
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Date: 2008-09-12 12:21 am (UTC)Thank you so much! And I didn't realize I had won until I saw this comment. omg XD
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Date: 2008-09-10 02:43 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2008-09-11 09:52 am (UTC)For not, see Chain of Memories clips. >:/
Thank you. ^^
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Date: 2008-09-17 07:40 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2008-09-18 12:00 pm (UTC)I actually feel less bad about it now, but that's because I just watched what he did to Zexion. And just. Snarl is a good word for my reaction. Yes. >:/
niiicely creepy!
Date: 2008-10-09 04:31 am (UTC)