Challenge 196

[breathless-dawn.livejournal.com]

Challenge: [196] Fifty Words
Title: Dominance
Word Count: 50
Notes: I'm so mean to Riku...

The air is thick and heavy, smelling of death, making his lungs protest with every breath.

He pushes on.

Amber eyes appear in his vision, a laugh echoes in the dark.

He pushes on.

Darkness’ fingers gently caress his throat, whispering death in his ear like a song.

Riku screams.

Comments

[iki-teru.livejournal.com]

love love love love this. Words cannot begin to describe.

[breathless-dawn.livejournal.com]

Thank you for the wonderful comment! I'm so pleased you enjoyed this :)

[mishiru-shi.livejournal.com]

s-so touching <3

I love this, really

[breathless-dawn.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[cygna-hime.livejournal.com]

Oh, Riku--! *snugs* I love how every single word contributes to the feel of the story.

[breathless-dawn.livejournal.com]

I know, I know :( I'm so mean. *hugs him* I'm so sorry Riku!!

Thank you so much for lovely the comment! I really appreciate it :)

[greedchan.livejournal.com]

;_;
oh man.

[breathless-dawn.livejournal.com]

I know... I feel very bad for doing this to him, rest assured :(

[frostfromfire.livejournal.com]

Darkness’ fingers gently caress his throat That sent shivers down my spine! Seriously, this is so wonderfully chilling. Love it!

[breathless-dawn.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I'm so happy you liked it :)